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January 26, 2009

Divine Gifts of Yoni Review

Filed under: Reviews — jaems @ 7:00 pm

Kasshin

It’s been well over a year since I started ECKC’s Divine Gifts of Yoni. It’s a fat book. It doesn’t help that I’m a slow reader, but seriously, it’s over 600 pages long. As a fat book, it is also an expensive book, especially if your shipping that bulk across borders. So was it worth it? For just about 2 years of decent reading, I’d say so.

As usual, I do my best not to try and predict my impressions of indie/amateur works. Getting your hopes up is 90% of the time a fruitless endeavor, this is something I’ve learned from even mainstream media, and as expected in a story as large as TDGY, there are plenty of rough spots. However there were also a lot of parts that were unexpectedly impressive. There was also a consistent spirit behind the writing, although it wasn’t perfect, you clearly knew what the author was trying to interpret. And with a strong main cast, I often found myself choosing to read this book over other mainstream and classic titles I was reading at the time.

So, the Divine Gifts of Yoni: It features two worlds, each with their own set of stories which connect the two together. Each world stars a group of main characters accomplishing various goals and pursuing some kind of crystal/god based prophecy to metamorphose the two worlds. The whole story is honestly a bit blurry and hard to follow as it is stretched far through the many personal dilemmas of the cast. It probably isn’t to the most benefit of the story for the largest aspect of the plot to be so uninvolved, however the personal quests of the characters are interesting and do carry you through the book.

Interestingly enough, the best thing I can compare the story to is fan fiction. Yes, it’s an original story, but it has that “I should be reading this on the internet” vibe. There is indeed a couple anime-esque stereotypes to the story, more so in feeling than content (aside from furry ears, tails, and harem scenarios, of course), but above all I think it’s the fondness the author has for her characters that shows through the pages, giving them a very fan written aura. It also carries the negative aspects of fan fiction, including frequent spelling mistakes, seemingly spontaneously conceived story layout, and segments which just don’t look like the author read through them after writing. This makes it completely worthwhile for me because I enjoy fan fiction, but the feeling is dominant enough that I would recommend that if you don’t like fan fiction, you probably should reconsider paying the 40 bux for this title.

As for the religious aspect, knowing where the author comes from, the connection between Yoni and Jesus are quite apparent in her writings. In the beginning of the story, the random prayers and praises to God seem to be rather bluntly jammed into the dialogue, thankfully however, the belief system get’s much more natural towards the end of the story. However again, unfortunately like many amateur christian authors, ECKC does try to take the CS Lewis approach and not explain the religious system of the characters, it’s just assumed that people get it. The difference from CS Lewis is that the belief system isn’t so much metaphoric as it is just swapping out words. Only people familiar with christian contexts will get it. Even if it’s obvious, it seems rather short sighted of us to offer no explanation for those who are unfamiliar with modern christian beliefs. Especially considering how varied modern Christianity can be. Sometimes it fits in a fantasy novel a little too well. Rather than just assuming that the characters beliefs are christian based because I know the story is from a christian community, I would rather have the story explain the beliefs to me through a culture more native to the worlds of the story.

There’s actually a few things in this book I can really pick on, so I’m just going to go ahead and get them out of the way. Probably one of the larger set backs is the fact that the chapters of this book are 30+ pages apart. They strike me as mostly redundant, especially considering that each chapter has multiple “star star star” breaks signifying time and scene changes. The strange chapter layout works double negatively with the balance of the two-world stories going on. There doesn’t seem to be a real organized sense of timing other than “now’s a good time to cut to…”. Sometimes you spend a chapter cutting back and forth between worlds while other times you spend so much time with one story that you have to backtrack in the book to recall what is going on with the other side. There is also an over abundance of parentheses. In a story where the narrator is already omnipotent, I can’t help but feel it’s just showing off when the brackets come out. The other big problem is the ending… actually I think I’m going to have to reread the ending. It was rather unsatisfying, i’ll leave it at that. The story seems to dissolve rather than resolve. Now I can see this being a benefit if there are going to be sequels but who knows when that might be? However, as I said, the smaller sub-stories tended to overshadow the global plot, so I can’t say whether or not I’m missing out on something terribly exciting. I’m more so dissatisfied in the mood the story went out on.

Now in the book’s defense, which I think its primary benefit is in its readability: it’s a very easy story to just pick up and get lost in. The world immerses you and despite a couple dry spots, it’s a very easy book to keep reading. I wouldn’t say it’s up to the point where you can’t stop reading. Although, yes, there were a few spots where I couldn’t put the book down, but it has a very casual, contemporary flow which doesn’t fatigue you very quickly. The characters again, are quite enjoyable. I can’t say I ever found them to be very deep and layered, it isn’t hard to guess what each one might be thinking, but they do grow and develop with the story and it’s very motivating to witness this. Like any great fantasy novel, the story also has many settings and creatures which are fairly original and overall interesting. In fact, the story reminds me a lot of the Escaflowne movie. Lots of flowy, beautiful, emotional scenes, with random spots of splattered blood and violence to keep the testosterone up. I love that movie.

There’s a lot more details I would still like to go into about this book, but after looking at what I’ve already written, I’ll just cut to the summary. A lot about this book screams “take me to the next level!” but that is what I like about it. It’s an excellent foundational story and it sparks my imagination to think of where the author is going to go from here, whether with these characters which I’ve grown quite attached to, or something entirely new. Like a lot of classical literature it flows great, is entirely rememberable, yet makes you want to seek improvements. More details, better arrangements, new stories, it’s a very inspiring book. If you’re okay with the anime/fan-fiction style of story, I’d recommend that you consider adding this book to your collection. I know it’s quite happy in mine.

January 11, 2009

Game Plan! v1 Review

Filed under: Reviews — Tags: , , , — jaems @ 12:45 am

Hey, a post with substance for once.

Kay. Inkhana and Calbhach’s Game Plan! is probably the most current comic I own, at least until I get Josh Alves’ newie in the mail. Honestly I should have reviewed this title a few weeks ago when I finished it, but whatever, I’m sure my memory is fresh enough.

Game Plan!

Alright, Once again I am needlessly reviewing a free webcomic which you could read and judge for yourself if you wanted. Or maybe you’re like me and can no longer tolerate staring at a backlit screen for hours and hours unless something is moving. Yes, that’s right, I don’t read the Game Plan! webcomic, but that doesn’t mean I have anything against it. I bought the book so I could check out the story in traditional comfort.

Now what can I say about it? Notice Game Plan! has a pretty positive following online, which you would expect as it is the main (and to my understanding, hosting) comic of christianmanga.com and I must say that the fan following is pretty much deserved. The first volume was a genuinely decent read.

Normally I’d protest the right-to-left reading style. I mean, it’s English written. If your not Japanese, don’t try to be. You’ll hurt yourself (I know I do). But to be honest I didn’t even notice I was reading the Japanese way for a good couple of chapters. So well done.

The characters came off a little too strong with stereotypical manga personalities at first but I felt they toned down, or at least spaced out, as the book progressed. Or maybe I just got too involved in the story to notice? Anyway, I think that’s evidence of the good job Inkhana and Calbhach has done. Even the “mascot” ends up being less annoying than expected.

The story itself: no real complaints for a first issue. It goes into the main story and progresses steadily without getting much more complex. It follows the stereotypical rolls of a bitter depressed nonchristian befriending an upbeat christian of the opposite sex and the story follows as expected for most of the book. However there is room for plot twists in future volumes which could either be brilliant or disastrous.

But it’s fun and involving. The characters, while mostly typical (as most all mainstream manga is ‘typical’ these days) are developed enough to keep you interested and wanting to read more. And I do get impressed when a christian story isn’t scared to show the possibilities for both the relationship involvements and complications of the characters. I’m not sure what much more you’d want from amature webmanga, but this book has done enough to get on my good side. If you’re not already drowned in this scene, check it out.

January 2, 2009

potd 4 page 11+12

Filed under: News, Peregrination of the Deliverer — jaems @ 3:33 pm

couple more pages up and the story is …. getting less interesting, oh well. I can accept that. However I’m working on a script for another PotD sidestory that’s pretty crazy, in theory, maybe.

I have a couple of indie book reviews I need to write up and post here, sometime soon, just so you know.

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